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**First Draft**

The comings of difficulties are endless, and will never stop. Thus makes the readers must choose a choice, to solve it or end it. In the novel "Of Mice and Men", John Steinbeck teaches the readers that people should be brave, but that does not mean people can face everything in lives, sometimes people find there’s no better way to solve a problem, so they need to know how to end it for these problems, and also for their self-extrication.

End could be a good way for a better life to both oneself and others. In the novel John Steinbeck writes: "She [Slim’s dog] slang her pups last night," said Slim. "Nine of 'em. I downed four of 'em right of. She couldn't feed that many."(From Pg 35) Slim's dog gave birth to 9 puppies, but he knows that the dog could not feed this much pups, so he downed four of them for the other five puppies. If Slim does not kill these four, all of the nine pups could not live well. So end four of these pups' lives is a way to make all of them live better. Thus end is not always a bad way of solving problem. It sometimes might be the best choice. People should know the way to end.

If people are not brave enough to end a thing, let others end that might also be a kind of extrication. ”At last Candy said softly and hopelessly, "Awright- take 'im." He elid not look down at the dog at all.” (From Pg 47) Carlson makes Candy to give his dog to Carlson, the dog is old and may suffering everyday. And finally Candy agrees and let Carlson takes his dog and kill it. Candy does not want his dog die, but he knows that it's suffering. So he lets Carlson to kill it, and he feels better that its stop suffering. When people do not know how to solve a problem but only end it, and if they are not brave enough to end the problem, people should let others help them.

If end is not a good way but a better way than any other way, people should be brave to end it. There’s a quote from the novel “Of Mice and Men”, ” And George raised the gun and steadied it, and he brought the muzzle of it close to the back of Lennis's head. The hand shook violently, but his face set and his hand steadied.” (From Pg 106) The quote is about how George kills Lennie. Although kill Lennis will also destroy his dream, he could not think out a better way, so he could only end it. George knows that kill Lennie means kill their dream, but he could only use this method, because that's the best way of solve this problem.End is not a good way, but that may be the best way for a specific event.

People may not like the word “end”. And end a life is illegal now. But for some specific event, the only way that called “end” is a good choice. The author of “Of Mice and Men”, John Steinbeck explains to the readers that end might not be a bad thing. When people do not know how to solve a problem, they should know how to end that.


 * Second Draft **

The comings of difficulties are endless, and will never stop. Thus makes the readers have to make a choice, to solve it or end it. In the novel "Of Mice and Men", John Steinbeck teaches the readers that people should be brave, but that does not mean people can face everything in lives, sometimes people find there’s no better way to solve a problem, so they need to know how to end it for these problems, and also for their self-extrication.

End could be a good way for a better life to both oneself and others. In the novel John Steinbeck writes: "She [Slim’s dog] slang her pups last night," said Slim. "Nine of 'em. I downed four of 'em right of. She couldn't feed that many."(From Pg 35) Slim's dog gave birth to 9 puppies, but he knew that the dog could not feed this much pups, so he downed four of them for the other five puppies. If Slim does not kill these four, all of the nine pups could not survive. So end four of these pups' lives is a way to make all of them live better. Thus end is not always a bad way of solving problem. It sometimes might be the best choice. People should know the way to end.

If people are not brave enough to end a thing, let others end that might also be a kind of extrication. ”At last Candy said softly and hopelessly, "Awright- take 'im." He elid not look down at the dog at all.” (From Pg 47) Carlson makes Candy to give his dog to Carlson, the dog is old and may suffering everyday. And finally Candy agrees and let Carlson to takes his dog and kill it. Candy does not want his dog die, but he knows that it's suffering. So he lets Carlson to kill it, and he feels better that its stop suffering. When people do not know how to solve a problem but only end it, and if they are not brave enough to solve the problem, people should let others help them.

If end is not a good way but a better way than any other way, people should be brave to end it. There’s a quote from the novel “Of Mice and Men”, ” And George raised the gun and steadied it, and he brought the muzzle of it close to the back of Lennis's head. The hand shook violently, but his face set and his hand steadied.” (From Pg 106) The quote is about how George kills Lennie. Although kill Lennis will also destroy his dream, he could not think out a better way, so he could only end it. George knows that kill Lennie means kill their dream, but he could only use this method, because that's the best way of solve this problem. End is not a good way, but that may be the best way for a specific event.

People may not like the word “end”. And end a life is illegal now. But for some specific events, the only way that called “end” is a good choice. The author of “Of Mice and Men”, John Steinbeck explains to the readers that end might not be a bad thing. When people do not know how to solve a problem, they should know how to end that.

**Tracy's Editing: **

 The comings of difficulties are endless, and will never stop. Thus **it** makes the readers **have to** choose a choice, to solve it or end it. In the novel "Of Mice and Men", John Steinbeck teaches the readers that people should be brave, but **it** does not mean **that** people can face everything in lives, sometimes people find **that** there’s no better way to solve a problem, so they need to know how to end it for these problems, and also for their self-extrication.


 * Ending** could be a good way for a better life to both oneself and others. In the novel, John Steinbeck writes**,** "She [Slim’s dog] **slangs** her pups last night," said Slim. "Nine of 'em. I downed four of 'em right of. She couldn't feed that many."(From Pg 35) Slim's dog gave birth to 9 puppies, but he **knew** that the dog could not feed this much pups, so he downed four of them for the other five puppies. If Slim **did** not kill these four, all of the nine pups could not live well. So end **of four** pups' lives is a way to make all of them live better. Thus end is not always a bad way of solving problem. **Sometimes it** might be the best choice. People should know the way to end.

If people are not brave enough to end a thing, let others end that might also be a kind of extrication. ”At last Candy said softly and hopelessly, "Awright- take 'im." He elid not look down at the dog at all.” (From Pg 47) Carlson makes Candy to give his dog to Carlson; the dog is old and may **suffer** everyday. And finally Candy agrees and **lets** Carlson **to take** his dog and kill it. Candy does not want his dog **to** die, but he knows that it's suffering. So he lets Carlson to kill it, and he feels better that its stop suffering. When people do not know how to solve a problem but only end it, and if they are not brave enough to **solve** the problem, people should let others help them.

If end is not a good way but a better way than any other way, people should be brave to end it. There’s a quote from the novel “Of Mice and Men”, **“**And George raised the gun and steadied it, and he brought the muzzle of it close to the back of **Lennie**'s head. The hand shook violently, but his face set and his hand steadied.” (From Pg 106) The quote is about how George kills Lennie. Although **killing** **Lennie** will also destroy his dream, he could not think out a better way, so he could only end it. George knows that kill Lennie means **to** kill their dream, but he could only use this method, because that's the best way of **solving** this **problem. End** is not a good way, but that may be the best way for a specific event.

People may not like the word “end”. And **ending** a life is illegal now. But for some specific event, the only way that called “end” is a good choice. The author of “Of Mice and Men”, John Steinbeck explains to the readers that end might not be a bad thing. When people do not know how to solve a problem, they should know how to end that.

Editing by April-Jiang; ** The comings of difficulties are endless, and will never stop. **Thus makes the readers must choose a choice, to __solve it or end it__.** ** （ **** what is “it”?). ** In the novel "Of Mice and Men", John Steinbeck teaches the readers that people should be brave, but **in fact people can not face to everything brave and solve that successfully,** sometimes people find there’s no better way to solve a problem, so they need to know how to end it for these problems, and also for their self-extrication.
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End could be a good way for a better life to both oneself and others, **in that ranch.** In the novel, John Steinbeck writes: "She [Slim’s dog] slang her pups last night," said Slim. "Nine of 'em. I downed four of 'em right of. She couldn't feed that many."(From Pg 35) Slim's dog gave birth to 9 puppies, but he knows that the dog could not feed this much pups, so he downed four of them for the other five puppies. If Slim does not kill these four, all of the nine pups could not live well. So end four of these pups' lives is a way to make all of them live better. Thus end is not always a bad way of solving problem. It sometimes might be the best choice. People should know the way to end. **(I did not notice this quote before, but I understand your idea through this quote)**


 * If people are not so brave enough that can make an ending of a thing, (may be you can write that meaning in this way.)** let others end that might also be a kind of extrication. ”At last Candy said softly and hopelessly, "Awright- take 'im." He elid not look down at the dog at all.” (From Pg 47) Carlson **made** Candy to give his dog to **himself**; **because** the dog **was** old and may suffering everyday, **(it is useless to anyone)** and finally Candy **agreed** and let Carlson take his dog and kill it. Candy does not want his dog die, but he knows that it's suffering. So he **had to** let Carlson to kill it, and he feels better that its stop suffering **of old dog**. When people do not know how to solve a problem but **only way is to** end it, and **if they are not brave enough to end the problem, people should let others help them.** **(I do not agree with that, anybody should solve problems or end the things by themselves.).**

If end **it that** is not a good way, but **it is** a better way than any other way, people should be brave to end it. There’s a quote from the novel **(I think you should have a translation)** “Of Mice and Men”, “And George raised the gun and steadied it, and he brought the muzzle of it close to the back of Lennis's head. The hand shook violently, but his face set and his hand steadied.” (From Pg 106) The quote is about how George kills Lennie. Although kill Lennis **it will** also destroy his dream, he could not think **another better way,** so he **only could choose to end it**. **George knows that kill Lennie means kill their dream, but he could only use this method, because that's the best way of solves this problem. ( you have written about that meaning).**__End is not a good way, but that may be the best way for a specific event.__ **(I like that conclusion)&(May be should use past participle to write)**

People may not like the word “**ending**”. And end a life is illegal now. But for some specific event, the only way that called “**ending**” is a good choice. The author of “Of Mice and Men”, John Steinbeck explains to the readers that end might not be a bad thing. When people do not know how to solve a problem, they should know how to end that. **That is the last way and the best way.**

**Yan's Edit** Grammar#3

The comings of difficulties are endless, and will never stop. Thus makes the readers must choose a choice, to solve it or end it. In the novel "Of Mice and Men", John Steinbeck teaches the readers that people should be brave, but that does not mean people can face anything in lives, sometimes people find there’s no better way to solve a problem, so they need to know how to end it for these problems, and also for their self-extrication.

End could be a good way for a better life to both oneself and others. In the novel John Steinbeck writes: "She [Slim’s dog] slang her pups last night," said Slim. "Nine of 'em. I downed four of 'em right of. She couldn't feed that many."(From Pg 35) Slim's dog gave birth to 9 puppies, but he knows that the dog could not feed this much pups, so he downed four of them for the other five puppies. If Slim does not kill those four, all of the nine pups could not survive. So end ing four of these pups' lives is a way to make all of other live better. Thus end is not always a bad way of solving problem. It sometimes might be the best choice. People should know the way to end.

If people are not brave enough to end a thing, the way that let others end might also be a kind of extrication. ”At last Candy said softly and hopelessly, "Awright- take 'im. He elid not look down at the dog at all.” (From Pg 47) Carlson makes Candy to give his dog to Carlson, the dog is old and may suffering everyday. And finally Candy agrees and let Carlson takes his dog and kill it. Candy does not want his dog to die, but he knows that it's suffering. So he lets Carlson to kill it, and he feels better that it stop s suffering. When people do not know how to solve a problem but only end it, and if they are not brave enough to end the problem, people should let others help them.

Sometimes end is not a good way but a better way than any other way, people should be brave to end it. There’s a quote from the novel “Of Mice and Men”, “And George raised the gun and steadied it, and he brought the muzzle of it close to the back of Lennis's head. The hand shook violently, but his face set and his hand steadied.” (From Pg 106) The quote is about how George kills Lennie. Although kill Lennis will also destroy his dream, he could not think out a better way, so he could only end it. George knows that kill Lennie means kill their dream, but he could only use this method, because that's the best way of solve this problem.End is not a good way, but that may be the best way for a specific event.

People may not like the word “end ”, and end a life is illegal now. But for some specific event s, the only way that called “end” is a good choice. The author of “Of Mice and Men”, John Steinbeck explains to the readers that end might not be a bad thing. When people do not know how to solve a problem, they should know how to end that.

= E van's Editing=

The comings of difficulties are endless, and will never stop. Thus makes the readers must choose a choice, to solve it or end it. In the novel "Of Mice and Men", John Steinbeck teaches the readers that people should be brave, but that does not mean people can face everything in lives, sometimes people find there’s no better way to solve a problem, so they need to know how to end it for these problems, and also for their self-extrication.

End could be a good way for a better life to both oneself and others. In the novel John Steinbeck writes: "She [Slim’s dog] slangs her pups last night," said Slim. "Nine of 'em. I downed four of 'em right of. She couldn't feed that many."(From Pg 35) Slim's dog gave birth to 9 puppies, but he knows that the dog could not feed this much pups, so he downed four of them for the other five puppies. If Slim does not kill these four, all of the nine pups could not live well. So end four of these pups' lives is a way to make all of them live better. Thus end is not always a bad way of solving problem. It sometimes might be the best choice. People should know the way to end.

If people are not brave enough to end a thing, let others end that might also be a kind of extrication. ”At last Candy said softly and hopelessly, "Awright- take 'im." He elid not look down at the dog at all.” (From Pg 47) Carlson makes Candy to give his dog to Carlson; the dog is old and may suffering every day. And finally Candy agrees and let Carlson takes his dog and kill it. Candy does not want his dog die, but he knows that it's suffering. So he lets Carlson to kill it, and he feels better that its stop suffering. When people do not know how to solve a problem but only end it, and if they are not brave enough to end the problem, people should let others help them.

If end is not a good way but a better way than any other way, people should be brave to end it. There’s a quote from the novel “Of Mice and Men”, ” And George raised the gun and steadied it, and he brought the muzzle of it close to the back of Lennis's head. The hand shook violently, but his face set and his hand steadied.” (From Pg 106) The quote is about how George kills Lennie. Although kill Lennis will also destroy his dream, he could not think out a better way, so he could only end it. George knows that kill Lennie means kill their dream, but he could only use this method, because that's the best way of solve this problem. End is not a good way, but that may be the best way for a specific event.

People may not like the word “end”. And end a life is illegal now. But for some specific event, the only way that called “end” is a good choice. The author of “Of Mice and Men”, John Steinbeck explains to the readers that end might not be a bad thing. When people do not know how to solve a problem, they should know how to end that.



【I can understand what you want to say in your essay. However maybe you can connect your end to the Steinbeck’s attitude to death in your conclusion】

 * Essay Outline

Introduction: // Background Information: // ** // **Hook:** // The coming of difficuliities are endless, wil never stop. Thus makes the readers must choose a choice, to solve it or end it. // **Thesis Statement:** // In the novel "Of Mice and Men", John Steinbeck teaches the readers that people should be brave,but that doesnot mean people can face everything in lives.

// **Topic Sentence:** // End could be a good way for a better life to both oneself and others. // **Evidence** //**:** "She slang her pups last night," said Slim. "Nine of 'em.I downed four of 'em right of. She couldn't feed that many." P35 // **Explantion** //**:** Slim's dog gave birth to 9 puppies, but he knows that the dog could not feed this much pups, so he downed four of them for the other five puppies. // **Connection** //**:** If Slim does not kill these four, all of the nine pups could not live well. So end four of these pups' lives is a way to make all of them live better. // **Conclusion/Transition Sentence:** // End is not always a bad way of solving problem. It sometimes might be the best choice.
 * Body Paragraph 1:**

// **Topic Sentence:** // If people are not brave enough to end a thing, let others end that might also be a kind of extrication. // **Evidence** //**:** At last Candy said softly and hopelessly, "Awright- take 'im." He elid not look down at the dog at all. P47 // **Explantion** //**:** Carlson makes Candy to give his dog to Carlson, the dog is old and may suffering everyday. And finally Candy agrees and let Carlson takes his dog and kill it. // **Connection** //**:** Candy does not want his dog die, but he knows that it's suffering. So he lets Carlson to kill it, and he feels better that its stop suffering. // **Transition Sentence:** // When people don't know how to solve a problem but only end it, and if people are not brave enough, maybe someone could help you to do that.
 * Body Paragraph 2:**

// **Topic Sentence:** // If end is not a good way but a better way than any other way, people should be brave to end it. // **Evidence** //**:** And George raised the gun and steadied it, and he brought the muzzle of it close to the back of Lennis's head. The hand shook violently, but his face set and his hand steadied. // **Explantion** //**:** The quote is about how George kills Lennie. Although kill Lennis will also destroy his dream, he could not think out a better way, so he could only end it. // **Connection** //**:** Although kill Lennie will destroy his dream, he could only have the way, because that's the best way of solve this problem. // **Transition Sentence:** // End is not a good way, but that may be the best way for a specific event.
 * Body Paragraph 3:**

// **Thesis** //**: :** 1. End could be a good way for a better life to both oneself and others 2. If people are not brave enough to end a thing, let others end that might also be a kind of extrication. 3. If end is not a good way but a better way than any other way, people should be brave to end it <span style="color: #000000; font-family: Verdana,Geneva,sans-serif; font-size: 10pt;">.
 * Conclusion:**